There is no light,
There is no day,
Only the night,
No chance to get away.
Forced to live in a cave,
Bounded by shackles and fear,
Each man a slave,
There they stay year by year.
Until one man decides to strive,
To escape the false reality,
He found himself alive,
With new knowledge and vitality.
The rest, without any wisdom,
Are stuck to live without freedom.
I really like your sonnet and the rhyming. Good job!
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The sonnet flowed very well and you had some really good rhyming in there..great job just remember to write in iambic pantameter!
ReplyDeleteI like your rhymes because its simple but effective. Good Job!
ReplyDeletenice job :) i enjoyed reading your sonnet. It is simple but straight out. good job Devon :D
ReplyDeleteI really like your sonnet. It flows nicely. I really like the lines "Until one man decides to strive,
ReplyDeleteTo escape the false reality,
He found himself alive,
With new knowledge and vitality."
well done :)
This is a fantastic sonnet. One of the best sonnet's I have ever had the privilege to read. Not only was their great content, but the way the sonnet just flows together makes for an interesting read. The rhyming was excellent, but simplistic as well.
ReplyDeleteGood job capturing the struggle of the prisoner who was first able to escape his chains and get to freedom.
ReplyDeleteVery deep. The flow and rhyme was legit.
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http://pkimrhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/2012/11/allegory-of-caves-sonnet.html
I liked your rhyme scheme and diction, they were very well done. Good job!
ReplyDeleteThis is a job well done! You understood the allegory, and have a good spin on it
ReplyDeleteGreat job, i really enjoyed the simplicity of your sonnet! i found it clear and uncluttered, my favorite part was the ending.
ReplyDeleteI really like your sonnet! You did a great job of understanding the message and all the rhymes were clever! Good work, Devon(:
ReplyDeleteThis is simple and to the point. I like it a lot, the only thing is the iambic pentameter was off. Comment on mine please! Thank You
ReplyDeleteShort and simple. A little lacking on the iambic pentameter but besides that I have no complaints. A good little sonnet you got here
ReplyDeleteIt it flows and is easy to read. I like it :)
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